Judas

Do you like it when I cut?

 I turned the knife on me as well,

 My wrists; they spell profanity, 

But you chained them in your cell,

 Do you like it when I scream?

 I tore my vocal cords to shreds, 

Calling out for God in tears, 

Swallowing each bullet that you fed, 

Did you like it darling, when I hurt? 

Did my back hurt your knife? 

Did it feel good deep inside, 

When you heard I took my life? 

Because I screamed at you, 

And bled for you, 

And tore my soul out all from you, 

 

How could you? 

 You made me hate me,

 Begging for you to save me.... 

 And my fire- is dying....

Reviews

[Nix is typing...]

*CRIES* OMG I CAN'T! THIS IS SO HAUNTINGLY BEAUTIFUL!!! It's like you're saying the words I couldn't voice in middle school.

[LazerRays]

Middle school is a tragic time.. Yes. Thank you :))

[the tipsy writer]

This is beautifully dark and describes your(?) thoughts quite well and gruesomely romantically. Well done friend!

[LazerRays]

Thank you!!!!

[barleygirl]

Typically I'm not a fan of torturous psyche screeching unless one's ideas are expressed with some artfulness & this is why your message is powerful & effective. This is the poster child for turning one's pain into art (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[LazerRays]

Thank you for your review :)))

[The dark Hydra]

...is my life? I'm sorry I'm so fucked up

[LazerRays]

Nah you good. Message me

[Light and ashes]

This is twisted, but I like it. Bleed with your pen and not your own blood.

[LazerRays]

As an author, it is my duty to tear my heart out for the entertainment of others. Thank you for the review :)

[Light and ashes]

You're welcome 😊

[wordman]

cut me deep,cut me wide,is it my pain that you need,watch me bleed

[LazerRays]

Thank you wordman!

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Oh my! Such a deep emotional read. powerful imagery. so nicely written

[LazerRays]

Hey thank you! :D

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

not a problem, it was very good

[Rye]

WOW! So dark and so well expressed, really enjoyed this write

[LazerRays]

Thanks So much :)

[Chris Shaw]

Dark and violent with its imagery, but these lines are so good. . Makes me think of a well known poet who took her own life. Keeo writing.

Chris

[LazerRays]

You mean Sylvia Plath? Yeah I do like her, and I guess I was having an emotional breakdown while writing this. Thanks for your review

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome.

[Pete]

so dark and disturbing. pain is a release. title, pic, wording, imagery - certainly gets the 'point' across (pun intended) ... :)

[LazerRays]

THank you Pete :) that means a lot