Another Bad Poem

My Bad Poem....hope it makes the cut for the contest

    So... I was walking down the boulevard with my orange flamingo,
 and my purple unicorn
apathetic to the nosy on lookers,
I continued while sending  them subliminal messages
to follow me to the brown & green castle
where they will be un-willing students
of my experiment (muah ha ha)
I used to study physics and thought
if my experiment works, next year
will be a lucrative fiscal year for me
I had to find a way to attract them to the castle ,
so I placed images of hamburgers and cotton candy
in their minds
Soon they will be opening the doors to discover.... .

It was at that exact moment the drugs
wore off and I woke up to the stark realization
 that everything was just
a holographic illusion of my imagination

Reviews

[Rayree Parker]

Nothing bad about this ! @ all girly .. I'm surprised u needed the imagery of tasty burgers and the always desired cotton candy ... Purple unicorns usually posses the power to draw almost anyone in if looked right in the horn ?? Hhuummmm must be west LA or something ? Great piece and beautiful mind u have Ty for sharing this with us !!!

[SarahLin]

Thanks for checking me out. Glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Neon]

Lol .. what a funniest one you are. I didn't know you're a cool one too. I enjoyed reading this, i loved the ending when i read that it was a holographic illusion of yer creative mind. Good work, Sarah.

[SarahLin]

Us, I'm a little crazy cool too. Thank you

[Neon]

That's great because .. I love seeing someone as beautiful as you feel 'Crazy'.

[Chris]

I laughed... you drew me along well.

[SarahLin]

Thanks for taking a read Chris. Glad I could bring a smile to your face.

[Antoñyo]

HI Sarah, and sorry for the loss of this...glad you refound it!
It's not bad at all...and I remember begging, "Can I have it?" lol j/k

Thanks much!

[SarahLin]

Glad you stopped by . :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

well it might have got MY vote.....Crazy yet somehow quite plausible

[SarahLin]

Funny you should say that because I voted for yours...everything is plausible in my imagination ..

[Dr. Wood ?]

Imagination is everything in poetry, and thanks for the vote, see you at the next competition

[Jack...]

Sarahlin, I thought I reviewed this one already but I guess I didn't. Very cool and sorry, there is nothing bad about this poem at all...but good luck anyway in the contest. :)

[SarahLin]

Well, I didn't make the contest so I voted for Dr. Whos' poem. I don't remember where I saw it but the voting is being left up to the readers and there are five poems to choose from. You're right..you did already read this but I had accidentally deleted it and when I re-wrote it I named it a little differently...Whoopsie.. Thanks for stopping by.

[Jack...]

Well just know, anything you write I will be there.