Steel Walls And Shards Of Glass

Just to remember the look on your face,

A conversation I wish I could erase.

What you've ceased to realize in all the time that’s passed,

We’re both unable to surpass steel walls and broken glass.

No one person is at fault for things,

We both left each other standing in the rain.

If I could go back, rewind the hands of time,

I’d take you in a moments notice and make you mine.

For not one second has passed that I haven’t loved you

Or thought of you in even the smallest of ways.

If given another chance for our love to grow,

I’d risk the cuts and broken bones.

Reviews

[apennylate]

The rhyming and syllable count is actually quite spot-on... The breath and lines are also very well done... As for content, the wordplay and metaphorical brashness is absolutely captivating... I think we have all been there... Between steel and fragility... Beautifully penned...

[mournful bear]

very well put! love doesn't exists like this in this world!! truly a love that is to be!!! some times in our own eyes, yet still love!!!!!!

[EcstaticEuphoria]

You are a great writer. This piece blends simplicity and truth with such grace. Love it!

[andrew mitchell]

nice work indeed on the pledge of undying love.

[Giulia King]

Your poems are my favorite thing to read every morning :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Then I am truly honored and blessed. 😍

[Coyote Poetry]

You are brave dear Anastasia.
"If given another chance for our love to grow,
I’d risk the cuts and broken bones. "
The above lines dangerous and second chances rarely work. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Hebe]

Great rhyming and nostalgia of what could have been! Well done.

[Aubrey Harrell]

Fantastic! The rhyming and rhythm is spot on. The heart ache is truly felt in this poem. I have never felt this myself, but I think I felt it here. Love your work keep it up.

[Jessica Lima]

There is nothing worse than to live on what 'could have been'. But we all do it. :)

[Bear]

Another page from the book of life's relationship section, I always it find it fascinating to learn of the different ways people deal with challenges of surviving a relationship. Seeing how others do it can educate and inspire the rest of us so thank you and well done my friend. Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Stacy Purvis]

You cannot take that which is not freely given, and you cannot make someone love you. Better to walk away peacefully and begin to heal.
Many blessings, Bear xxx

[Bear]

True but how many people are blinded to everything but what they want to see even to the point seeing what isn't there? That is why poems like this are so important, they offer understanding, insight and guidance one may not acquire on their own for years or maybe never if their blindness continues. Word to the wise, offer up your experience and you may save other not only pain but maybe life :~)

[Stacy Purvis]

True...
Thank you for your words of encouragement.

[Joey Nizz]

The verses with each rhyme are incredible, well wrote.