Serenity

No matter how beautiful a place is, a place is just a place without him by my side.

I found a place quite suddenly,

As dusk became twilight,

Stars peeked out so radiantly,

Sky unraveled the night.

 

Around my feet the grass glowed softly,

Grew brighter where I tread,

The neon green sparkled lightly,

As pollen crowned my head.

 

I looked up as a sharp, shrill cry,

Arose from an old oak,

A glint of gray, a flash on high,

Burst as the birds awoke.

 

Melodic songs drifted the air,

Beauty through all the trills,

The angelic calls echoed there,

With the proud whippoorwills.

 

A stirring in a close-by lake,

Drew my attention there,

I saw the water ripple, shake,

A beast returned my stare.

 

It had been painted by a god,

Sunset orange and white,

It seemed to give a small, curt nod,

Before darting from sight.

 

This place was magic in each way,

Shrouded in clarity,

It could go by no name, I say,

Than by Serenity.

 

But then I looked back to the skies,

And watched the starry night,

In it I saw his deep blue eyes,

Realized this wasn't right.

 

Though it was warm and perfect still,

It shone with midnight dew,

An empty place upon a hill,

Waits there, without you.

Author's Note

This is just my way of saying that imagery and magic are nothing to me unless a certain someone is there to share it with me.

Reviews

[Arthur Henn]

This whole canvas of beauty is wonderful Katie. I like the way you started it and ended it...

I found a place quite suddenly,
As dusk became twilight,
Where stars peeked out so radiantly,
As the sky unraveled the night.

Though it was beautiful and perfect still,
As it shone with a midnight dew,
It would just be a glade on top of a hill,
As long as I'm there without you.

[Stella]

The imagery of this poem is amazing and I loved how well this poem flowed all together. This is beautifully written and your wording creates the perfect mood for this poem. It gives the reader a true sense of serenity and peace.

[Kruppz]

Love this one. Beautiful imagery, beautiful flow, beautiful work. I love poems that end well.

[Coinneach MacAnraoi]

You have an awesome imagination. I agree with your Note. The best things in life, no matter how grand or how simple, are only worthwhile if we have the person we love beside us to share them with.

[deeps]

This is plain wonderful, love the emotions you write with.
Love the flow and rhyme scheme. Awesome write!

[Callista-Jade]

This poem is amazing. Again I say it, you are an incredible writer! =)

[Tate Morgan]

very nice as you can see it is xtremely hard to write a abab poem

[SheSpeaksVolumes]

I love the fairy tale quality of this, lovely!

[Jupiter Jazz]

You paint a lovely picture with your words