Gun For A Tongue

Words that kill.

Gun For A Tongue

Let the bullets fly

From your mouth

Let them hit me

With a jolt of pain

And ultimate confusion

Let what comes next, 

The rush of blood trickling down, 

Condescend my every action

And state of being

With the words you have spoken

And the dark tone

Of your gunfire

Spit more bullets out

Because you still have ammo

And you see me lying there,

Struggling to hold on

While my eyes are bleeding tears

I trusted you

With the secrets I kept buried

You turned around to back-stab

But found another weapon

It left my body on fire,

My heart scarred,

And my soul damaged

Like you wanted

Out of this earthly plane,

I was cast into my darkest shadows

You were left still standing

You and your

Gun for a tongue

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Unspeakably powerful...you've worked this metaphor for perfection, and garnered my undivided attention along the way...I wonder how many poets out there were inspired to become poets on the basis of what you're written about here...it was certainly a factor in my decision to pick up the pen many moons ago. In other words, I relate to this one very much and I'm sure I'm not alone in that regard...phenomenal piece Savannah.

[Savannah Bly]

Wow, Thank you so much for your kind words, they mean a lot. I am glad you enjoyed the write! :)

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

powerful write...as emily dickinson said "words have the power to heal but also the power to kill"

and that statement is as true as this poem.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you, I am glad you like it!

[Mandy Rose]

While reading this, I could sense the raw emotion that the speaker of the poem has and you definitely have a very well-developed metaphor for betrayal. I'm in love with this poem!

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you so much!

[Mia Edlund]

It's beautiful. Reminds me of my life & bits of it take me to my youth when I was bullied & betrayed. Very moving.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!

[MBUYISA]

NICE POEM THANKS FOR SHARING

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!

[Hope]

Oh my ! This is just another of your great works ! :)...It's totally unique and very good ! :)

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!

[Hope]

You are most welcome !! Good day ! :D

[Lyn Anderson]

An insightful look into the art of being back stabbed. Skillfully delivered.

[Savannah Bly]

Well thank you! I am glad you liked it! :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

very, very good, Phoenix. Love the analogy; people need to learn to conserve their bullets. Very nice write!

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you! I am glad you like it! But this is Savannah Bly and my poem. FlamingPhoenix is a loyal friend and reader. You can send RR's of others' writes to your friends too...sorry for the confusion.

[Saddam]

I trusted you
With the secrets I kept buried
You turned around to back-stab
But found another weapon
It left my body on fire,
My heart scarred,
And my soul damaged
Like you wanted.

Powerfully beautiful art is this. A great piece of verse. Nicely penned dear. I muchly enjoyed every words.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you! I m glad you enjoyed the piece.

[MARK JOHN JUNOR]

great piece...words can build or destroy...i feel you in this...wonderful write

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!