Crucified Heart

Crucified Heart

She lost him forever

There were no excuses to justify

She knew it when she looked in his eyes

His heart she crucified

Her life, her choice

Who she was the night before

No thought of an "us"

Just how to heal her damaged inner core

It is weird for him

Watching her look at others

He can't make her stay either

Time for both to find new lovers

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Another excellent write. I guess you are writing in real time. I have hard time going with your close to rhyme and excellent division of stanzas and your more expressive and professional write. I have to go with the other one and both getting shaded. That appears to be what Charley, our great leader, says from the afterlife. Sorry. You get runner up and one after that.

[Savannah Bly]

Than you, and yes I did. Watching my friends struggle with relationships and school and then watching us all move on has got my poetry speaking loudly. I love words and am always looking for rhymes that describe what I am feeling even if I end up with different words and phrases! Thanks again, I am glad you enjoyed the write!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Love can be a fickle mistress. Knowing you are causing someone to hurt unbearably is no reason to stay together.
A well written piece. I like it.
Clive.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you for another great review!

[David Scott]

A crucifixion is intentional cruelty beyond compassion with intent to toucher, humiliate, intimidate and control.
Did you really crucify him? I think not. Yet we do give these dramatic exaggerations power in our failings. It is more like crucifying our own selves when we place such negativity on our behavior.
In the end however, over is over and dead is gone...
Interesting write.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you for your thoughts.

[Coyote Poetry]

A honest and direct poem. Come a time when two people must go different directions. I like the closing line in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you for your kind words!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

time for each to have a resurrection of sorts...because their love was betrayed by a kiss that felt like it had lost its luster and passion...in the healing there can be no us...we have to find new lovers.
a very sad story here...but one that happens quite often.

[Savannah Bly]

Yes. I agree. Thank you!

[Hope]

"She knew it when she looked in his eyes"...I love this line ! Eyes are the windows to the soul ! They speak tonnes :) I personally love this poem and the ending is so touching !..
"It is weird for him
Watching her look at others
He can't make her stay either
Time for both to find new lovers.." ! Great job ! :)

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you so much!

[Hope]

You are most welcome :) Good day !

[Sami Khalil]

Sad but true. A reality of many. A splendid poem...:).........

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:).....................