Not Worth It

little words

A burning sensation in my nose builds
as my eyes start to itch incessantly
forming tiny drops of salt water
coalescing into pools of tears
that burst forth and pour out
flowing down the bridge of my nose
dripping into the cleft above my lip
mixing with the mucus that has escaped,
sliding over my swollen, blistered lips
combining with saliva, turning into drool,
leaking down my chin, onto my shirt,
making a mess, just because you said,
I wasn't worth it.

Reviews

[daemok]

The "mixing with the mucus" had me almost spitting onto the floor. Haha! You really described the imagery well enough to have me grossed out and yet nodding in satisfactory in the end.
I do enjoy the play of words, you weren't shy when it came to throwing "incessantly" or "coalescing" in your writing. Lots of people would have scratched their heads wondering what they meant. *Try putting a small key at the end of your well-worded poems for those who need a dictionary. ^^

[Laura Maidah]

Line breaks are random and don't promote meaning. Thematically brilliant.

[Marissa]

Great description you really got into that part.

[words of rooted design]

Lovely.

[GunMetal]

Little words that can affect you like an allergic reaction. Your description here is great. I pictured it like how on the show House MD they describe what is wrong with the patient, and they show what is going on inside the body. Good write.

[w]

I've only seen maybe a half an episode of House, but I know it is a medical show so thank you :)

[Corset]

Little words are huge when they effect you in such a way. words like my forgetfulness has already forgotten her. or just not worth it, such hurtful words, but the good news is that there are tears. This write is extremely raw, realistic. gw

[Mackenzie Brooke]

I can feel and relate to the emotions in this poem, great poem it really got at my heart :)

[Dove]

I felt this one. This is really good. It's a sad story thats easy to relate to and it was brilliantly written. great job!

[Jordan A. Wilson]

The lack of punctuation really drives this piece. Good write.

[Amila Jay]

Wow. I almost felt this one very much indeed. A brilliant poem :))