Offering Her Up

Saying goodbye can be fun.

She’s sleeping,
lying there
before me.

 

Standing over her
I witness glory.

 

Her multi-hued hair
frames a face
that Aphrodite
is jealous of
which is delicate,
serene and calm.

 

And calm I struggle with
as I watch her chest
rise and fall,

 

her unsymmetrical
bare, beautiful breasts,
so young and perky,
lie above the sheet
that is draped
over her hips
which are
attached to
her legs
that I would love
to see spread wide
for my viewing pleasure,

 

but as I step forward
her deep brown eyes flutter
and they quickly take me in.

 

As her mouth opens to scream
I raise up my god.

 

“I came to see you off to your heaven.”

Author's Note

The pacing is supposed to change throughout the piece. Read a line break as a continuous thought. Punctuation is self-explanatory.

Reviews

[words of rooted design]

Quite an arousing write.

[Blue Ivory]

Beautiful and sensual...I love the sequence and the thought process and everything. It's all very nice! Definitely going to my faves!

[w]

Thank you so much, I am glad you enjoyed it

[Laura Maidah]

"I witness glory... I raise up my god." OMG.

Put this on wbeat

[w]

Done. and thanks. :)

[demureminds]

You're really great at painting a scene along with the moods in a lot of your pieces, this one included. I also liked the flow of this, very fluid and great lead up to the climax at the end.

[w]

Thank you for continuing to read.

[That_Girl]

Okay well the ending was a little... creepy (not sure if that's the right word for it) but it made the poem amazing. Well done.

[w]

:)

[Destinyxi]

As her mouth opens to scream
I raise up my god.

“I came to see you off to your heaven.”

For some reason I don't understand those parts =/ Besides that, I liked this poem :)

[w]

god = gun