Giving In To Give Up

She was carefree
and running barefoot
through Devou
when the pansy
fell from her hair.

Gunshots were so close
that my ears were ringing.

Bending down
and picking up
the yellow flower,
she saw me
watching her.

I turned to see what I heard
and missed what I needed to see.

With a smile
that was meant
for me,
she tried to meet
my eyes.

The shot was meant for me and how
I wish it would have hit its mark.

Crimson soiled her
and her knees hit grass
and her smiled faded
and she looked
relieved.

I rushed to her side to stop the ebb,
but her outstretched hand stopped me.

“I will gladly take a bullet
for the man with love in his eyes
for a woman he had only seen once
for love at first sight
only happens when
we let go and
let another in
with trust
and without
expectation.”

Reviews

[Marissa]

Great job. I really liked how you put the quote at the bottom to go with the poem.

[w]

The "quote" is the end of the piece and my own words so I am not sure you could call it such, but thank you very much.

[shunik]

the emotions are a mixture of good but bad
haha
beautiful
=]

[Laura Maidah]

Too amazing. WIl wow. wow. F**k me hard. THis is so good.

[Destinyxi]

Wow, gave me shivers. Very nice write.

[Corset]

beautiful story, I especially relate to these lines "“I will gladly take a bullet
for the man with love in his eyes", but all is wonderful in this write :) I enjoyed the love at first sight romance of it.

[kristen]

That's a movie moment, and "trust is everything"! :)

[J. F. Charleston]

That's something I wish I could here from a girl that I love when I first see her. This will certainly go in my favorites.

[That_Girl]

Like eglantine said, tragic. This is wonderfully done.

[eglantine]

tragically beautiful