A Winter Without You

Haiku

A gray day closes
as white falls on the dead grass
the stone reads "forgiven"

Reviews

[shunik]

this feels like a very cold winter
=]

[R.A. Youngblood]

Short but powerful! Tells a lot, thanks for sharing..Keep it up buddy :D

[Blue Ivory]

Not to sound utterly stupid, but I didn't quite get the punchline...
Your poem is so beautiful, I would love it if you would tell me what the last line means

[w]

That in the end everything is forgiven and nothing bad matters anymore.

[Blue Ivory]

Oh. Wow that's a really nice way to imply it!

[Falling Leaf.]

Ciao,

This is sad but great. The only thing that I noticed is that you said it's haiku but the last line has six syllables. Other than that this was really good.

Arrivederci!

[K-mo]

short but deep, well done

[C.A. Lucas]

Aw, even being a haiku, the meaning of this, despite the length, dug pretty deep. I like haikus and think I should start writing them more. My father tells me that writing poems is a great exercise for writing novels and short stories, because they force you to express a lot of meaning with few words.

[w]

I can't seem to write more than a few sentences anymore, so I think I will stick to poetry. :) Thank you for the comment.

[C.A. Lucas]

My pleasure.