Reaction

Not my story, but one I have been able to witness and tell.

Wet salt is dribbling down my lips
and onto my chin, covered in stubble,
sliding its way to the increasing
wet spot on my green Kermit the Frog shirt.

Liquid copper is filling my mouth
as my nicotine stained, decaying teeth
are biting down on my unusually long tongue
and I wonder if I should swallow it
or let it linger with the shed tears.

I am rocking back and forth
in an uncomfortable black chair,
my eyes fluttering and my hands
gripping and pulling tufts of hair.

She is standing over me, saliva at the corners,
the rest of her mouth a tight thin line.
Then those lips part and I try to listen
when my best friend's wife
tells me that she is having my baby.

Reviews

[Amelie]

Wow this was too much for a visual person like me, it was almost watching a scene from a film in HD (love the opening stanza), all to that certain "reaction". it was utterly and incontestably vivid, and it tells how much of a passionate father you are.

[Corset]

graffic, raw, incredibly portrayed, cinematic, heartbreaking, drama bomb. excellent, excellent penmanship.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

wow I did not expect that, the last 2 lines Im kinda of stunned ... thinking of what to say um ????? Great imagery and truthful flow. Is there anything significant to the 4 5 4 5 lined stanzas Maybe I read to much into things like that like maybe there's a little secret code to be found or something

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

Wow. There's so much emotion in this. The imagery is so vivid. It's very powerful. Well done.