Letter to God

Dear God,
Hi. It’s me again. I’ve got a question for you.
Can we have another Christmas?
I know the season’s for peace, and good will and all,
But it’s not what we need.
God, we’ve screwed up this world so bad, that what we need
Is another Messiah.
Another savior.
Another redeemer.
'Cause we ain’t doin’ so hot.
And I know that we nailed the last One to a tree,
And I really am sorry,
But if you take a look around our culture,
We haven’t exactly “conquered the grave,”
Resurrection or no resurrection.
We’re more bloodthirsty than ever,
Infatuated with sin,
And desperate for whatever will hurt us most.

We're in a committed relationship with death,

And if we don't speak now and forever hold our peace,

We might just end up married in some back story Las Vegas chapel.

So please, God,
One more time.
Please.
I don’t need things this year,
All I want for Christmas,
Is a Messiah.

Reviews

[Lady of the Lake]

Woooow! I loved this poem! :D It certainly wasn't what I was expecting (although I should have with your title and all). The only constructive criticism I can think to offer is to replace "cuz" in the tenth verse with "'cause" because it's more "professional".
Things that I loved: the religious allusions all throughout, really liked the personification of death, and that you made it into an extended metaphor (I think that's what you call that...?) when you go on to suggest marriage with death (and the allusion to marriage, etc, etc.) I just think you have an excellent grasp/mastery of literary devices (one that I admire) and I liked your message very much (because it's so true...) so all I can say is well done! :)
Keep up the good work :)

[Nicole]

thank you so very much! i'll go fix that right now :)

[Lady of the Lake]

No problem! It was very good regardless! :)