Dark Decender

The coyote in the hamoc

There was a coyote in a hamoc

Bleeding from its mouth,

And it's paws

It was resting its head

The creature had a long journey

I'm sure it was dreaming

Of wide pastures

And running rabbits

Not even the tree's

Had mercy to its rest

As the road ahead

Cradled it like a moon

The moon was its friend

Its savoir

But it still bleed

Resting in the human hamoc

As  it being said

Its voice taken

It held no grudge

Against the world alone

Author's Note

What have humans done to the world we live in.
Art is mine

Reviews

[Terohime]

Loved it. ^^

~Res

[SHEEMA HUQ]

This is excellent, with your pacing of words, choice of vocabulary, subject matter and approach to the subject, very powerful

[Barbara Walker]

This made me feel so sad.

[unsavable_soul]

I must say I enjoy your art piece with your work here.
You will go far with your creative nature, as a whole it's interesting and unique. In complete honest nature, as I am . There may be a couple typos if you're interested and I wasn't sure about what is going on, but I thought the ending conveyed forgiveness or apathy to what had happened. Though in the same breath, you have some very, very nice mental imagery going on. I felt worn out with the character, then some what peaceful, followed by pained but accepting of my situation. All this could be wrong of course; my lethargic mind.

End game I really like this piece and accompanying art, you're a creative little genius with places to go in this world.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Ravyne Hawke]

Beautiful metaphors and similes.. gorgeous art.. all around wonderful work here.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Perfection - simply prefection!

[tamsen grier]

Beautiful art and beautiful lines. My only suggestion would be to take out the "I'm sure" in the second stanza: inserting the first person takes me out of the images of the poem. Also, did you intend to use "savoir" or "savior"? ("Savoir" is "knowledge" in French...an interesting slip if it was one!)

Favorite lines: As the road ahead/cradled it like the moon. Lovely!

[Sami Khalil]

I agree with the other reviewer . A nice poem and art work...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

I like the art - it fits the piece well. There are some intriguing images here. The most poetic verse in this piece:

Not even the trees
Had mercy to its rest
As the road ahead
Cradled it like a moon

Very nice!