Hush Now

Hush now, Quiet now

It is time to lay your sleepy head

Under the willow

That speaks your name,

There are stories,

Even I cannot explain

Where you are the hero,

Where you are the villain,

Where any type of sound

Works against you

All work is not in vain,

Even if your past is not clean

Your future is

Indefinitely a bunch of unknown steps

Look forward

And search for it

Long for it

Kiss it

You are not a monster

If you are

We are all

A monster

Don't fail to come to me

When you need help

My dear friend

You are neither the batter, nor the judge

Never be afraid

This is the world

It is beautifully cruel

And  exceptionally sweet

Hush now, Quiet now

It is time to lay your sleepy head

Author's Note

A poem about my new character Rubin an oc(orginal character) of a pixel game called off. Hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

Perhaps more of the game idea under Author's Note would help clarify the confusion so are having. Since reading your responses to others' confusion, I better understand the poem now. I agree though that is began as what seemed like a lullaby and then changed somewhere in the middle, but hey, who says all lullabies need to be sweet.. dropping a baby from a tree branch is certainly not a sweet lullaby.. lol. Anyway, rambling here.. enjoyed this piece much better after reading it a 3rd way through.

[Barbara Walker]

Beautifully cruel and exceptionally sweet! Life is such a paradox!

[unsavable_soul]

I did enjoy,
This is a nice piece. It is simple but conveys it's supportive nature. You write from the heart, and no matter what some might think I find more beauty in that than the endless dribble I often see which mirrors every other piece of dribble on the same subject. You will go somewhere just keep up the writing and we will all know Abby some day, some way.

I did find something that threw me though as to why it was being used.

"You are neither the batter, nor the judge"

Where does "batter" fit in, I figured I would ask so I could get the whole piece more clearly. Keep up your heart and keep writing from it.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Rivaxorus]

xD someone already asked that. The batter refers to the main character of the game off he is called the batter, the judge is another character a cat like demon creature in which has a large collection of knowledge to help the batter and the player kill the phantoms that are around the strange world of off.

[unsavable_soul]

Nice,
That is a really interesting concept, did you create it or does it really exist already?
Sincerely
Chris

[Rivaxorus]

I didn't create it, I'm not sure who did, it's a pixel game you can download and play. This is just a poem about a fan character I made for the game. Google pixel game off and I'm sure something may come up.

[unsavable_soul]

I will,
Thanks Abby.
Chris

[Rita L. Sev]

Some good lines here; I like the repetition of the opening and closing lines.

[Astro]

Last line would have rhymed nicely, if you wrote it, "It is time to lay your head and sleep" But I know you were going for a repetitive idea to finalize and reiterate your imagery. Did you mean to say (we are all 'A Monster') or, (then we are all 'Monsters')? Either, I think would work. Interesting.

[Rivaxorus]

I meant the second one xD but yeah. Thanks ^w^

[clisa]

I feel like you may have some trouble with English grammar. Some of this is a bit jarring - you start out like a lullaby but then in the middle the line, "Even if you past is not clean" yanks the reader out of the idea of a lullaby. It is unclear if you are speaking to a child or an adult. I know you are writing about a character, but this is so unclear. There is no clear image here. I don't have any sense of who the writer is or who the person being written about is. Also I do not understand the reference to "the batter". I am sorry, I must be missing something.

[Rivaxorus]

That's cuz it's a poem about a character from a game called off, the main character of the game is called the batter. It's not supposed to make any sense, because off really doesn't make sense. It's hard to explain if you haven't played the game.

[Sami Khalil]

A good write... Really enjoyable...:)