stray

If I were to die tonight

What would you say

Would you give in to temptation

To your emotions

What would you do

If you couldn’t save me

Author's Note

Touchy feely stuff xD I enjoy writing it, even when I'm really happy like now.

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple and truthful.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I enjoy the emotions of this piece and the uncertainty. I would like to see the question marks instead of no punctuation. I think this is something we all struggle with. Who will love us if we are close to death.. friends, lovers, loved ones. And how would each react? Definitely so pondersome points in this piece.

[Barbara Walker]

big question to one who holds all emotion in. What needs to occur for those emtions to open up? Hope it doesn't have to be something this drastic!

[unsavable_soul]

Very interesting,
I like the simple straight forward nature to this piece, few lines say paragraphs in context to your title. It is strong like the simple idea of confronting the fear of watching death to give comfort. This speaks volumes more than just to it's direct implications therefore could even be related to our fellow man. I can think of recent events where such things have been the subject. So talented.
Excuse my ramblings and potentially way off notions.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Jupiter]

Hi Seimei,

I like that the title is bold and larger. It gives the initial impression and emotion of the piece.

This brings a lot of emotion and thought to me. I wonder what it truly means underneath the lines. If you were dying, would the one you love, love you back? How would they feel if there was nothing they could do to save you? It says give into temptation compared with emotions. Is the person the author loves holding back for some reason? Would death be the only thing to make them admit how they felt?

Powerful piece. I enjoyed it. Thank you.

Jupiter

[KeeD]

I like the premise of this, I just wish there was more I find it some how incomplete. < 3 that being said.. it is inviting. Maybe I was wrong and it is complete but it leaves for the reader to reflect and come up with his/her own answer.

[Rita L. Sev]

A short piece that expresses much. Very good!