Silence

You make me feel worthless, 

and you don't even know 

The darkness that looms over my shoulder - 

you don't even know

I'm tying - 

but my lungs don't fill with air 

like yours do like 

theirs do 

The silence is my friend- 

because you don't listen anyhow 

I'm not afraid of it, 

unlike all of you 

The short end of the fire - 

the darkness that I feed off of 

When I try to communicate, 

it doesn't click

It won't matter anymore - 

I'm only crying empty tears 

because 

that's what they are to you

Author's Note

"You frustrate me, I can't even have a fun conversation about some information I've acquired without you criticizing it. Everything I say is wrong so why do I bother."

Reviews

[Jonas]

You can feel the idea behind this-- feeling transparent when you demand to be visible, knowing that your suffrage means nothing to anyone around you, and that even if you shout it, it will remain a secret till the days of your grave.
I really suggest trying to build flow in each line, making it less
intermittent and
jagged.

[Sindu]

The frustration and silent pain can be vibrantly felt here. It's a worst thing to be surrounded yet be lonely. Every step, every move, every word - tied n bottled up. I like this in a free manner it is. Gives a peek into writers emotions.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and sad poem.
"It won't matter anymore -
I'm only crying empty tears
because
that's what they are to you"
The poem left wide open emotions for the reader. Never good emotion when we lose something we wanted. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[blue angel]

This sort of silence is deafening! Be empowered within those quiet thoughts, and never allow others to define you. I love this poem, the title drew me in. I wish you much success with your writing career --the world is your oyster! Respectfully, blue angel

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The sheer emotional turmoil in this piece is fantasticly readable well done

[luvs2write]

I can feel the pain radiating off of the words in this poem. It's so hard when people treat you like you don't even have a voice, especially when those people are close to you. Try to let it out through writing...I think that helps. You're talented, and your voice DOES count. Keep writing!!