Take a moment

Sunrise splendid colors
Lit the morning sky,
But no one stopped to look:
They kept on passing by.
There were only two,
Who bathed in light.
They stood there amazed
By its dazzling sight.

Author's Note

What did you think about it as a whole

Reviews

[ImSJ]

Nice. You should watch your spelling, punctuation and word choice though, Sam.
Line 3 stooped stopped?
Maybe a stanza break between lines 4 and 5 would work better?
No one stopped to look:
They kept on passing by.
Line 5: where/were
Line 6: Who would be a better choice than That.
Also this line does not scan with the rest.
Line 7: awe-struck seems awkward and pedestrian. What else could you use?
Line 8: beautiful seems an overused descriptor. Can you think of a substitute?
Overall I enjoyed this simple poem but I think you can improve it. Even the simple ones are hard I've found.

[Sam]

Ah! Thank you so much. I had posted it a hurry and didn't read it again. The review and tips definitely help! Thanks again!!

[Tony Jordan]

It'd be no use as a hole.
I mean holes are useful - we can bury stuff in 'em!!
oh...wait..as a whole, I see...
Well it did kind of get the message across but made the reader think - 'who are the two?' - 'what's their significance here?' - 'what am I missing?'.

[Sam]

Lol ya I'm not sure how useful it would be as a hole.
Thank you for your review!
I have been working on expanding or changing the poem: but I haven't really gotten anywhere; not quite sure where I want to go with it :|

[Inkh(e)art]

I really like this a lot. It's simple but elegant. Keep up the good work!

[Sam]

Thank you!