one final furious flicker

one final furious flicker

 

1

surface swelters

glows orange with hatred

charring nerve-endings

pupils project hellfire

war teeth bared

humanity explodes

into shrapnel confetti

pain swarms like

flies at fresh

rot

 

 

2

it is the final moment

a death pang of love

beaten into submission

like iron

whiskey reigns tyrannical

dark tidings slither

over warm smiles

blistered soul

walks the fire-rock

alone

 

 

3

he whispers her name

like a sweaty hex

her face appears

a lie

a slander

a life melts

like candle wax

into the achy redness

a menacing shadow

exorcised

by the sunrise

 

4

nobody saw him die

we just all sort of knew

it was over

 

5

parts of her

will never fully

heal

the scar is shaped

like a man’s

hand

it stretches from

Lockport to Gross Tette

her home has gone

from burn ward

to mass grave

 

 

 

Reviews

[L. Edward Neale]

Wow, powerful stuff. Enjoyed it immensely. The central character bears some ambiguity it seems it could be a war victim or even the conciousness of the earth its self suffering the destructive tyranny of man. Cheers for the heads up. Keep those requests coming.

[Geraldine]

wow! this is really something. I liked it. I love the your style and structure that you did. very well written.

[Sarah Nicole Nadler]

wow, this is dramatic and raw and real. I like it.

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

Wow, i am not sure what to say. I really liked this, it instantly captivated my interest. I really enjoyed reading this, Thank You :)

[Becky Clancy]

Very nicely written, I like it ^_^b

[Kenneth The Poet]

Even structure fires have a weird beauty to them.

[Who Cares]

Woah, sweet metaphors and intense imagery. Nice rhyme scheme, it added power behind your words. Your thoughts were clear and specific, nice work.

[asdarkeyesclose]

'walks the fire-rock
alone'

powerful - you create a little masterpiece, engaging the mind and taking us to the destructable edges of our lives. fantastic.

[freelancejouster]

even while purposely confusing and vague and double meaninged, i get the sense of story here. i think i like the fourth best. a kind of anticlimax before the actual. i could feel him slump.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Gosh, wow... this was interesting! I love the images and metaphors you used here. It's very well written. =)
Great write!

[SuicidePact.]

Well done!