one final furious flicker

one final furious flicker

 

1

surface swelters

glows orange with hatred

charring nerve-endings

pupils project hellfire

war teeth bared

humanity explodes

into shrapnel confetti

pain swarms like

flies at fresh

rot

 

 

2

it is the final moment

a death pang of love

beaten into submission

like iron

whiskey reigns tyrannical

dark tidings slither

over warm smiles

blistered soul

walks the fire-rock

alone

 

 

3

he whispers her name

like a sweaty hex

her face appears

a lie

a slander

a life melts

like candle wax

into the achy redness

a menacing shadow

exorcised

by the sunrise

 

4

nobody saw him die

we just all sort of knew

it was over

 

5

parts of her

will never fully

heal

the scar is shaped

like a man’s

hand

it stretches from

Lockport to Gross Tette

her home has gone

from burn ward

to mass grave

 

 

 

Reviews

[L. Edward Neale]

Wow, powerful stuff. Enjoyed it immensely. The central character bears some ambiguity it seems it could be a war victim or even the conciousness of the earth its self suffering the destructive tyranny of man. Cheers for the heads up. Keep those requests coming.

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

very nicely written...liked it.

[eatmills]

Very nice piece of art. One day I will own it. Hungover.

[Simbake777]

Conjures up images of bloody warfare! Powerfully written!!

Keep up the good work!! :)

[Trusting]

Cool background. :P Great detail as well. You sure caught my attention on this.

[s.r.knight]

I love the imagery of "flies at fresh rot". It's sickening and intriguing. Very powerful work!

[patricia]

i loved this. especially that second stanza. thanks.

[Pencrafter]

It's an interesting poem, streching our minds to understand what our eyes can barely read. Heavy with metaphores and contrasting images, we glance back and forth in an attempt to avoid being smashed by the train. My simple mind seeks meaning and a message. I know there's a door here somewhere if I can just find it. Nice rhyming statments and thoughts.

[Marie]

Some fair images here. I prefer simpler, more straightforward poetry.

[Elaenor Aisling]

Brilliant imagery and flow. A great write!

[Cathy Wattam]

This is a fantastic piece of writing. Such amazing imagery. Such sadness evoked. Some great phrasing. Red hot.