I WANTED A DROP

I wanted a drop you, sent me the sea,

I asked for a leaf, you gave me the tree.

I asked for some hope, you sent me a dream,

To bathe in your love, you sent me a stream.

 

I asked for a rose, you showed me your smile,

I took a small step, you moved back a mile.

I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,

I wanted to write, you sent me the pain.

Reviews

[zunie frost]

You got yourself a regular reader .... i just read about you and i 'm your biggest fan now ... your poems here are amazing i wanna to read your book ... i'll google it right away .....
I want to be a writer like you ...... inshallah may be one day i'll

[Shabeeh Haider]

I am honoured to have a regular reader. You will be a bigger and better writer, InShaAllah

[Miss Sharon]

This is fabulous! Very well written with very much to think about. This one touches me deeply. ~Sharon

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sharon, thank you for your words

[Miss Sharon]

You are quite welcome my friend! ~SP

[stargirl23]

I loved this and the gradual progression to the hurt in the last line!

[Shabeeh Haider]

thank you Adi for your kind words

[The Lost Poetry Files]

Love your style of writing, I loved reading this poem, the contrast near the end is amazing.

Well done :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you so much

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The simple rhythm adds depth to the words.
Good read. :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Fahmida, thank you

[Firemay]

wow. that's what i have to this poem. That's Amazing.
I loved how you connected everything.
I can't even describe what i liked. It just woed me.
Great job! Well Done!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Firemay, Thank you for such a wonderful review

[richieb]

This is wonderful, each line casts its own imagery. You have a gift and by using it as well as are you will be Blessed more and continue to be fruitful. I look forward to reading more of your gems.
Peace & Prayers,
Richie B.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Richie, thank you for your very kind words

[Gee]

Everything you wished given, then taken back when greener grass beckoned. Last line is a gem. Nice writing

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Gee. You have summed it up well

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A straight forward announcement of telling emotion, well done, good read.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Thomas

[iamshadowine]

wow! just amazing! the use of the simplest words in such an amazing manner! hats off! loved this piece and these lines were just the best
"I asked for a tear, you sent me the rain,
I wanted to write, you sent me the pain."
LOVELY! keep writing!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Shadowine, for your kind words. So nice to meet you here