RUBAI'Y ( Your name had been)

Your name had been in every breath,

This waiting is not over yet.

They have been tuned to search for you,

These eyes won’t even close at death.

Author's Note

A Rubai'y (plural Rubaiyat) is an Urdu,Arabic, Persian and Hindi form of four lined poetry that carries a distinctive message. The first, second and fourth lines have to rhyme

Reviews

[Annie Nicole]

Wow interesting, I have never heard of that kind of poetry, very cool! Thanks for teaching me something new!

[Shabeeh Haider]

It's a very lovely form of poetry. Thank you for your kind words

[zunie frost]

i like it !!!
i love who you make it rhyme !!!
very beautiful piece of work

[Shabeeh Haider]

Zunie, thank you for your kind words

[zunie frost]

Welcome my friend

[Sheila Kline]

The message is certainly distinctive so you followed the form necessary to present us a Rubaiyat. And what a clear message it is as one continues to search for a loved one even into eternity! Death has no boundary in finding a love as this; eyes shall continue to search, breaths become that which shall become those that seek.
Excellent!

[Shabeeh Haider]

Sheila, thank you very much

[iamshadowine]

this is one of the first rubai'y that i've ever read :) and this is really great write!
keep writing :D

[Shabeeh Haider]

Shadowine, thank you for your kind words

[GalaxyGhost]

I like the poem is such a nice one and I like the first and last line the best! Although I am still trying to decipher how I can relate or understand this poem, I do like its simplicity.

[Shabeeh Haider]

I think it is a pretty straight forward poem. Thank you for your words Galaxy

[GalaxyGhost]

You're welcome!

[Carolynn]

Ah the image of a love that goes beyond the borders of "life" and delves into the eternity of death...love it :)

[Shabeeh Haider]

Carolynn, thank you for your words.

[Lydia Shutter]

We always look for the ones we love. We look for them in dreams and even after they are gone. A lovely thought. Lydi**

[Shabeeh Haider]

Lydia, thank you so much

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and even in death, we still search for that love...our eyes remain open, gazing, looking...reluctant to close, and have the heart stop...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Jacob, for your input