DOUBT

 

Why do you shed these tears of doubt?

Why do you often grieve?

What makes you doubt the love we have,

Why do you not believe?

 

For is this thread of love so weak,

That it can easily break?

You strike my heart with words of doubt,

How more can my heart take?

 

When trust is gone what else is left?

For love is based on trust.

Don’t let this mountain crumble down,

Don’t let it turn to dust.

Reviews

[Shannon]

Sometimes poems with questions seem overly accusatory. In this case they flow nicely into a heart felt plea.

[Shabeeh Haider]

S. Mi, thank you for this kind review.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes having one doubt our love is a worse hurt than that person not loving us back.

j.

[Shabeeh Haider]

That's how it is, Jacob. Nice to see that you are back.

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured. Such a soft tone to your words, that resonates in each, until falling in the last line/plea/ Superb.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Nemo, thank you for this kind review

[Lorry]

You're welcome :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"When trust is gone what else is left?
For love is based on trust.
Don’t let this mountain crumble down,
Don’t let it turn to dust."
When the trust is lost. Love and friendship shall fade. The above line are true logic. Thank you Shabeeh for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shabeeh Haider]

Coyote, thank you for such a kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[emmajoy]

'Don’t let this mountain crumble down, -- -- Don’t let it turn to dust.'

This well-metered, finely displayed poem is almost like a prayer, a call to the heavens. Whether or not genuine emotion, you've found words that truly say how love and trust can be., how unsettled doubts can be, how hearts can hurt so much... etcetera.

Finely put.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you emmajoy for your very kind words.

[Paul Bell]

Afraid when you leave the house with doubts. The cracks will appear, the trust will go, followed by the love.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Paul, you have said it so well.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Yes, love is all about mutual trust, understanding and selflessness. This is a very emotional and sweet piece of poetry. Love is a strong bond between two people, if it becomes as weak as a thread then this bond breaks easily. And, when that happens, immense pain and grief enter the life of the person. So deep. Keep writing.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Thank you Vatsal for your very kind review.