In Thought of What is Left

Hidden away like a shadow in a dark room.

I sulk the night away with memories of the past.
What is it then that brings me back to thoughts of you?
Is it just that I feel like something is....
    Missing.........

I lay awake in my bed, feeling like I'm trapped within a tomb
Life use to flow so slowly but now it's flying by so fast.
Why can't I be happy too?
Is it that something is simply......
Missing.......

You hang onto my life, is it that I want you back.
Or is it that you drag me down this spiral.
How can this affect a wall such as me?
Is it that a brick has gone.....
Missing.........

I carry my emotions around in this pack.
I lay here on the ground in a pile.
Who is it at fault or is this just the fee?
To finally have another thing...
    Missing.....

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

I like the repetition of he word missing in this piece. It makes for each stanza to act like scene in a slide show. Each with a rich set of imagery and emotional tags. Very nicely put together.

Emotionally, this piece brings to mind the idea, what once was lost is either lost or may be found again. So keep on walking and turing over those flat river stones. You never know what you might find.

Nice Ink!
Aaron

[Robert Centner]

Thank you for the Review, I was kinda worried the the "Missing..." sounded too broken between each stanza, putting too much of a pause between them.

[Wolfwind]

Not at all. It works well, because it makes us think that the thought is drawn out, as if someone is lost in a particular moment. It's a good effect in my opinion. =)