Beyond Death

What lies for us beyond death?

Is there life beyond death?

Or is there nothing?

Trapped in damnation?

Or gone forever?

We all ask this question,

But we never find the answer

No one knows until after they die

But the living will never know

Is it an eternal purgatory? 

or is it an endless abyss?

Do not try to find out, 

For the Valkyrie will claim you

Death is an eternal mystery

And as long as it stays that way

We will fear it

We will hate it

We will obey its rules

But most importantly, 

We won't play with it's balance

Thus is the will of an oh powerful force we have never seen

But we fear it anyways

For the unknown will always scare us

We must all fear what lies in wait-

Beyond Death.

Reviews

[viola]

This is very different than the other poems I've read of yours. It has a completely different voice. Cool to know that you can change it!
I really like the 4th stanza. It clear and simple.
I like the last stanza too, except for the 2nd line. It feels awkward. I don't like the word "anyways."
I like your progression in the first 3 stanzas--start with the questions, follow with a lack of answers, more questions and why you can't find out. But they don't flow as well as the last 2 stanzas. I think it might be because you overuse conjunctions? (But, for, and, etc). I do the same thing, so I might be projecting my problem onto your poem.
As I said, I like it. I'm only nit-picking because I've seen how good you are!

[Ghost]

Let's get this straight there is an after life. Yet again why bother knowing? Once you cross over you can't go back. Why do feel like that. I'll tell you suicide. Killing yourself to know what is on the other side, but when you get there will you be happy or filled with torment. You may want to know how I know this. I can feel what you feel. You was dying inside. By the way amazing poem.

[Kayle Ann]

Hey, now. This is wunnerfullll. Its very nonchalantly existential.