It Hurts

Why are we so stuck in, running from the bullets. - Sign of the Times (Harry Styles)

My breath is falling down,

My heart is in dark,

My eyes are filled with water,

All because it hurts hard.

It hurts when I am tortured,

It hurts when someone goes far,

So far that no one can reach there,

It hurts when someone goes away,

And it hurts when I blame god,

That this world is unfair.

I just want to remove all those memories,

Which scream only for you.

And all those things,

Which make me blue.

Few know how it feels loosing someone,

Few know to control their heart in grief,

And few know,

The world is unfair,

And death is a thief.

Author's Note

What do you feel about this poem?
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Reviews

[Ruth]

Death is the ultimate thief and such grief after any loss, in whatever form, takes time....beautifully surrendered thoughts that make a most wrenching read...

[Shasha]

Thank​ you very much! I feel really very happy when you like my writings!

[Taz]

I feel that a huge sence of loss and sadness is portrayed here. Beautiful poem though.

[Shasha]

Thank you very much Taz, it means a lot!

[Taz]

You are most welcome my friend.

[writ rajat]

MY LIKE YOU WRITING POETRY BUT LET ME ADVISE YOU TO IMPROVE VOCABULARY

[Shasha]

Thank you very much. I Wil.

[APOORVA]

I just want to remove all those memories,
Which make me feel like someone is pinching,
It was better quarrelling with each other,
Now my heart is sinking.

everybody has a box of such memories that he wants to burn. some memories....

[Shasha]

Hm, really. But unfortunately, we can't burn them.

[Ashish]

R u kidding me?
This is written by a 12 years old girl!!

Though it was sad your writing was impressive. :)

Keep writing and India has bright future :)

[Shasha]

Thank you very much for your review and also for reading my poem...

[Sir_Anonymous]

It is well made yet again and is relatively relatable for me made me remember someone who's been gone long ago just not forgotten but the heart still is saddened... On that note I look forward to reading your other works of creation that will be made.... Oh and to not change sentence word count but still have it flow well why not put "My breath is failing now." at the beginning and the 3rd sentence start up why not put "These" instead of "that" so it's "I just want to remove all these memories." Anywho it's really all up to you.

Sincerely, Sir_Anonymous

[Shasha]

Thank you Sir_Anonymous. I can put "those" instead of "that".

[Tazeen Ahmed]

This poem is quite intensely penned..
Emotions are well conveyed!
Kudos

[Shasha]

Thank you Tazeen Ahmed.

[Cy!]

I can actually feel the hurt in this poem. :'( I can relate with this.

Suggestion: Instead of saying: 'My eyes are filled with water.'
You could say: 'Salty seas, threaten to spill out from my vision.'

Thought it would be cool. Lemme know :)

[Shasha]

Thank you again Locket Grey. But in this word number matches.

[emmajoy]

It's such a sad poem. It's sad but written with great emotion and clarity. For such a young writer you use more than fine phrasing.

I really would like to read some happier thoughts from you., Shasha. Look at the stars and find their flickering smiles... please

[Shasha]

Thank you and yes, I will write something happy next time.

[emmajoy]

I truly look forward to that happiness. Your friend, Emma