sun kissed visions

While breathing 
bits of sentences 
in and out and all 
night long...

  You killed my slumber dead you 
  slapped me 
  with your sweet 
   haiku.

     from clouds of color
     sun kissed visions fell through sky
     to be swallowed hot


                   

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© jnw

Reviews

[LadyNaida]

This is so deep and so inviting. I felt like I was in a Twilight Saga scene. Wow!

[howlfjdks]

What you read was alive! The last three lines are an excellent drop in the mind.

[CalebSchadeck]

very good poem short and sweet very good :)

[Natalie.]

Welcome. ^_^ This is excellent. I love that you've managed to compact so much imagery in so short a piece. And I see that you enjoy using the font as well as the words to convey a tone. Well done.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is one of those poems which you do not know how to review with the right words as it has sucha tremendous impact on the reader.Very original and just brilliant.

[LonelySoul]

Welcome to the group,from time to time I read a work that moves me to respond in my own poetic kind...please excuse my muse...
While reading,
pieces of a picture,
nightmare silently screaming,
a ray of hope,
burning truth within...LonelySoul

[spence]

Cool- I love how you built this to the haiku. The title is very suitable and helps the mind immerse into the poem from the off. Nice one, spence

[northern monkey]

Mesmerising.Thanks for sharing - an interesting learning experience for me

[Tomás Ó C..]

Reading at bedtime prehaps not a good idea? ;-p Loved the poem.

[Silence]

Very interesting. Each and every word seems to have it's own power, and combined, makes for one heck of a strong poem! In itself, the style is very unique, so I look forward to seeing what else you'll write in the future! Great work!