Free

I hope you like it!

I close my eyes,
to take a breath,
that seems to last forever.
Wanting more,
wanting less,
wanting to endure forever.
I open my eyes,
to see ahead,
whats in store for me.
What I see,
I do not know,
But it seems that I am free.

Author's Note

don't worry about the grammar just tell me what you think

Reviews

[Thea]

Wow...I love how the poem flows in every word! Such a beautiful piece...The idea is well expressed...Being free...I also noticed that you penned this in just few words but still, I like it! That's the talent! Keep it up!
:)))

[Hoosier Belle]

SO VERY wonderful, admittance is the key to be happy. Love this. Wonderful write. Inspiring read.

[child_of_music]

this poem was really good! what i got was when we close our eyes we want to know what will happen. we want to know what's ahead. we are all free in our own ways right? so, what are we going to do but wait and wonder about the future.

[HeIsWe]

I really like it, nice piece!

[Liz]

Hmmm... I like it!
Here's what I got from the poem: When the eyes are closed, you are waiting in anticipation. That moment seems to drag on forever. When you open your eyes, you are suddenly hit with everything in front of you and it's too much to take in. You feel vulnerable, yet free.
Great write!

[DalainaRenee]

Really beautiful poem! I enjoyed reading this! Thanks so much for the review! :)

[Sashalee]

ohhhh i like it! :)

[Ruth]

Sometimes to be free is not to see it all laid out before us..poignantly beautiful love xoxo