Lying underneath the twilight moon

An eclipse of the mind

Eyes shining like a celestial being

Her "Come hither" smile

All an entrancing beauty

Of this Angel in my arms

 

A shimmering moonlight

Casts over our embrace

As I gaze into the eyes of pure love

These eyes that entrance my soul

As we lie beneath the twilight moon

Reviews

[Helpless]

aaaaaaawwwwwwwww

[Skoo.]

Sherb, this is beautiful (: xx

[Joiedevivre]

like a lingering gaze. Alluring.

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is immense Sherb! Great, heartfelt, powerful poem.. x

[Fontane Wong]

Beautiful and compellling! The words are simple but it make an excellent poem! Fabulous write. Love it so much.

[☯]

Simple and compelling :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Stephanie Myler would be proud, well done

[Lily Mae]

Good write... :) xx I like it..x

[Matthew Smith]

"These eyes that entrance my soul" - Entrance makes no sense in this manner.

Not bad. Could be expanded a bit, but still not bad.