the spaces the spaces the spaces

want to ignore impossibilities

rifts that exist to askew

reach up and steal a slice of moon

tasting its covering is smooth and mellow

ascending high

 

say high

say high

LORD to erase the nonsense

pursuing lessons to serve as a crag

soaring well above milky oasis

S O S clearing the spaces

the spaces

the spaces

point out hesitation having a joke on me

owing it a lashing from side to side

as windshield wipers on a hallelujah trip

collect stars float through constellations

mouthing breathless wonder

enveloping the nations underneath

my this

my that

my

clearing senseless ions

uttering notions tempting me I crave...

the spaces

the spaces

the spaces

turn the leaflet over

give credit to the skies

begin agendas new

freedom for my mind

how my body will follow

Reviews

[Blue]

I agree with Frieda... Your stuff is unique. I tend to write literary so I admire those who were able to come up with fascinatingly ambiguous and mind-challenging poetry such as this. You are talented.

[Shirlena]

You know it means you have to be a little off to write like this lol. Thanks Blue.

[Blue]

Haha. I'm afraid I can't agree with you on that. :P

[Ai Lun]

beautiful poem! Your style reminds me of spoken word poetry :)

[Shirlena]

Thanks Aaron. Don't think I've forgotten about u. I'm coming cause I never forget.

[Kai Rollins]

begin agendas anew

I rather enjoyed that line. And although I lack my own complete interpretation to this.
It was a fun write. Thanks for this

[Shirlena]

Actually I'm talking bout nothing so don't be hard on your interpretation...sometimes I just like to go out there. Thank you Kai.

[Shaquana Adams]

collect stars float through constellations
mouthing breathless wonder
enveloping the nations underneath

turn the leaflet over
give credit to the skies
begin agendas new

I like how this poem is a kind of everywhere. It flows like a song. Good work :)

[Shirlena]

Thank you so much Shaquana for the review.

[Frieda P]

Always intrigued by the 'spaces'...

as windshield wipers on a hallelujah trip
collect stars float through constellations

Not so senseless after all, the imagery here is off the charts, going on the top shelf. Brava!

[Shirlena]

You are so gifted Frieda. I'm honored to be apart of your collection...thank you :)

[Frieda P]

Awh you're sweet Shirlena, your stuff is unique, always glad to be here :-)

[Lyn Anderson]

Your style is eclectic and eccentric, and very interesting. I only have one thing I noticed might be amiss - It's is its when it is possessing something rather than it has or is. :)

[Shirlena]

It is an oversight on my part...thanks for calling it to my attention.

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. Easy to miss in our own writing.

[Shirlena]

Oh I'm not concerned about stuff like that. I read over my work 100 times after I write it and eventually catch flaws but you happen to beat me to it this time:).