bean pies and bow ties

scenario from a fictional book

it began with an air of oneness

striking toward the eyes with unwavering concentration

wheat drenched with dark kohl disposition

fluidly working neck disciplined and finessed

fingers swerving and fluttering as 

white birds flying stair step

least what they resembled from 

certain vantage point 

his honeyed rhetoric survived the end of each sentence

he was convinced I was buying in...had signed out…gone

when the draw really was the chocolate of his eyes

assumed him comfortable...slaying a pencil legged suit and bow tie

(man sho' could profile)

all that boo ga looed about my head speaking loudly

repeated “aye cinderfella…talk about the word”

while my only intentions of indulging in such a picturesque show is nut brown confection wrapped in cellophane

at the hip of dapper Rameses and notions

to dispose of rare curtness

 

thought bubble to the left...suspended high

saying "brutha my brutha"

is there a chance you will let me convert you now

Mr. Clarion…may I

 

 

 

Reviews

[Cory Barrett]

You had me at bean pie.

This is is slick, smooth, and everything the bow tied man thinks he is love it. Nice to meet you mam

[Shirlena]

LOL...aww thank you SL. I'm so flattered I could sing.

[kublakhan27]

I love the honey and chocolate the seductive elements they bring to the table...my genuine cynicism towards romance compels me not to say too much about the dynamics (yeah I really am that sour haha), but I'm intrigued by both characters and the scene you've painted, and I feel like I know them fairly well. As always, you have a talent for establishing a scene in which your characters and themes are given a lot of room to grow, both on paper and in the reader's mind...great work as always Shirlena :)

[Shirlena]

I'm pleased that you relate as I didn't think most would. Hence the lack of views and readers but I wasn't counting on it for these last two poems anyway :). Thank you for finding something you could latch onto or appreciate kub :).

[Jumbo J]

Hi Shirlena,
Bean pies and Bow ties... now isn't that a great start to the ?
this an outstanding set of thoughts... loved the fluidity of your first two stanzas setting up that great ending... a stunning visual ride into fairytale- Disney land... so sister did you convert him? well did ya?
very colourful in description and very rich in flavour... seems you have a thing for snappy looker's, dressed up tight?... James xx

[Shirlena]

I do like a well dressed man lol and many of my characters or usually based off of someone real. I wrote about him another time that you actually know about from when I was on fs. This character is "tailored" after him with a few adjustments but no, I didn't have to...you know my using the word convert was a metaphor for seduce...I have seduced a few guys though (grin).

[Shirlena]

Oh and thank you so much for indulging me Jim.

[Jumbo J]

You know I thought of your fresh preacher boy all tucked up sporting the black rimmed glasses and bow tie look... yeah, I remember the fictional story you delivered back in the day of f/s... enjoyed it then and enjoyed this now... smile))))))))))))))))))))). xx

[Shirlena]

It's all base on a true encounter...I embellished and twisted things a bit :) Where you been man? You doing okay?