NIGHT AND I

That moment of satisfaction when it's just you and the loud sky...

Under the centuries old tree I sat,
Gazing at the millions of iridescent stars above me,
Winking playfully, sending chills down my spine
Never ceasing to amaze me.

Hands behind my head, I breathed in deep
letting the scent of the dying embers tickle my nose.
Exhaling a week's stress,
I felt at peace.

A gentle breeze played with my long curly hair,
while the soft grass danced in the wind.
Enjoying their prominent company,
I smiled to myself.

Envisioning the next escape from reality to experience nature at its best,
I felt sparks of excitement course through my veins.
But right now I closed my eyes, living the moment,
Feeling my spirit hover and ride into the infinite darkness.
It's just me and the night sky...

Author's Note

I hope you liked it! :)

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

beautiful lines!
a very elegant and intricate design...
"Envisioning the next escape from reality to experience nature at its best,
I felt sparks of excitement course through my veins.
But right now I closed my eyes, living the moment,
Feeling my spirit hover and ride into the infinite darkness.
It's just me and the night sky..."
excellent use of vocab Shaheera:)

[Red Rose]

Haha thanx Tazeen! ^-^ I find it a big deal gettin this review from you.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Please do send read requests for your upcoming poems, it a please to read em :::)))

[Red Rose]

Insha allah I will. Thankyou very much!

[Brennon]

This is really deep and calming. I'm looking forward to reading more. Full rating.

[Red Rose]

Thanx Brennon!

[Brennon]

Np! It's really good sooooo..

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Hands behind my head, I breathed in deep
letting the scent of the dying embers tickle my nose.
Exhaling a week's stress,
I felt at peace."
Mesmerizing lines! Loved the feel and flow of this..👍

[Red Rose]

Thankyou! ❤️

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome ☺💜

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes, I just did..

Well little painful but yet a punch full of emotions and complete story narrated via this poem. It look deep and even more than I thought. Good figure of speeches you used. Personification, Metaphor, etc. Well very well standing and excellent write up.

Would advise, if that helps, just stretch your work. I believe it, can be more detailed and longer to hold back the interest(s) of the reader!!

Kudos!!

Cheers!!
Singh :)

[Red Rose]

Thank you!
I will work on it and make it longer. Your advice is certainly helpful.
Thanx again. =)

[Vikrantsingh]

Welcome dearie :)