WHO MAD , WHO DIE - WITHOUT YOU.. !

love, life and death - Bitter Truth

I’m alive even without you

It’s not the end of life, so true

 

Your blind expectations were too high

Time I got to fly was fated for me to die

Mornings have taken light of the eyes

Night passes beneath, hopeless sighs

 

why still I hope to meet you in the sky

when “nothing” is left? just over to cry...

Author's Note

@ Devon: Thanks alot for you assistance with my poem.

Reviews

[rivers]

You'd have to be a stone for this one to not rock the deepest depths of the soul. This painting is the complete package framed and etched in stone...You move me Sibt-e-Hussain...Thank you for a morning wake-up call, of bitter truthful, raw reality...

[Shep]

Another gem to be found in words across the lands. Nicely done.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Very nice poem! My favorite is the second part. Fantastic!

[Just Another Writer]

Very nice use of imagery AND pictures to enhance the poem.. I liked it! Creative rhymes.. everything seemed to flow really nicely. Great job!

[Southern Cross]

Very emotional read. the line, "Your blind expectations were too high" 'tis sad we have people ready to expect from us more than we can give

[MOON]

Dramatically poignant. Great verse.

[devon]

Your emotions are clear and I feel them! Very nice work using imagery, and the pictures you've provided take the imagination and the empathy to a higher level.

You have a few choppy lines here and there and your grammar isn't the best, but it doesn't take away from the beauty of your writing!

Good job! :)

[DreamWeaver 2154]

Dark, taunting, and simplistic. Good qualities in a poem Well done. Emotions flow to their river's end, only seeing release past. Brilliant.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful artwork and poetry. The sadness came out in your powerful and strong words. No weakness in this amazing poem.
Coyote

[just is]

Whoa! Talk about your powerful deep writes,
This one really gets to you and makes you think.
Loved the imagery.