How I Met You

The moment I saw you

there was a beat to your gait

I could not wait

to be closer to you

for the first time

 

Coffee was the plan

although we found ourselves

with hot chocolate in hand

 

You and I

both clad that October

in weather worn leather

jackets

 

Our eyes met

as we wondered

is this he

is this she

that I have spoken with so often

yet have yet to meet in person

 

Now before one another

we say our timid hellos

beginning a relationship

that was meant to be

a new friendship

 

Instead we have found

ourselves

enveloped over the months

with one anothers' love.

 

That first day

you walked me to my car

I wondered and wished

if it were appropriate to kiss

yet I knew it was not

and it would prove to be many

more meetings before such

a thing came to fruition.

 

All the better

a true romance

a true friendship

a true courtship

in which I have grown to know

you in a way in which I have no other

and long for noone else but you

each and every evening

and each every morn.

 

 

Reviews

[Jaffa Forbes]

Very good poem as per usual! Full of wistful glances and just generally nice things. I found placing the rhythm difficult, and perhaps that's just because it's early in the morning and I am without coffee, but i think this just added to the airyness and floatiness of the whole piece. Very well done :)
Jaff

[Drachke Thoth]

You were meant for romance Novels Sid!! Beautiful togetherness in the piece.

-D

[Dan Bullock]

Oh I love it :)

How we dream and wish of such situations and yet...they come true!

Wonderful warm words. x

Your pieces tell a wonderful story, and have a wonderful canvas of colors depicted by your chosen words.

I can feel your aura, and I love it, it is very bright and positive.

I am in a visual addiction, you know how to paint with words.

A wonderful piece.

[Robin M. Isle]

What a beautiful love sonet. As I know of whom you speak of. Nicely written. Flowing ever so beautifuly, just as it all HAS unfolded.

[Justin Tobey]

Excellently written. I have to agree completely with Bridgey; it's very Siddartha. :) All of your writing has a flowing, airy, light grace to it, usually with hints of nostalgia. This piece is a culmination of all that you are as a writer, and it's amazing.

My one critique would be to revise this line: "yet have yet to meet in person." The two "yet"'s, so close together, offsets the rhythm of the piece a little. Nothing major, but you might consider it.

Overall, a fine work. :D

[4ammonologues]

It has a tone of excitement - the thrill of a new romance. But on the other hand, it also made me feel comfortable. very well done.

[R J Askew]

'weather worn leather' and 'timid hellos' are my favourite parts as they capture the gentle excitement of the moment. I also like the way the relationship takes hold in a slow-burn way.

[Ivan_allanbard]

Very true one, and it sounds very familiar to me...;) Keep writing, my friend! I'll review your other writing soon too, I'm sure I'll like it!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Wonderfully romantic and sweet; a clandestine meeting of the minds turned to love over coffee ( or cocoa) I think the chocolate more appropriate for loving lines as sweet as these.