A World that dosn't care

a little girl stands alone
on the corner of the street                           
her daddys at war
and her mummies dead
she got no one.

her eyes leaking tears
her sorrow to great to bare
all alone in this world
where people just dont care.

who can be bothered with one little girl
busy lives and troubles of our own
that girl dosn't matter in a world that dosn't care.

she calls please help me! but do we listen, no
because she dosn't matter in our world that dosn't care
her words have little value in a world that dosn't care

and wat becomes of the little girl
standing alone on the street?
our world dosn't care, i know that for sure

That's what we need to beat

 

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Other then one spelling goof, I thinks its an awsome work! This is such a prevelant problem in today's society, it does need to be adressed and its something everyone should help stand up and beat. I have seen those lonely outcasts of society. on the streets, on the bus, and even in school hallways. Thank you for writing this remarkable peice! Keep up the great work!

[Sangria Green]

I like it, I really do. Good topic...but there are a little grammer issues and it need more imagery.