Broken doors and windy lanes

life is not an easy journey..

Times churned, played their part;

spun a web of mysterious paths.

Took you on a high, plunged you in a dive;

Tumultuous notions created, all the

Improbabilities shoving you down.

 

All the pain, all the sadness

All that heartbreak over those

Never regaining blooms.

An indestructible threshold unnerved by your pleas,

Keeping you away, keeping you out.

 

Time to lift yourself up, turn 

away from those looming walls.

Broken carriages led till they went down,

Time to ride the bike down unknown windy lanes

Weave new threads and lay new ways.

My darling! There's a lot more to live

And suffice it all over again.   

Reviews

[zainul]

Excellent write.
Enjoyed its beauty and inspiration.

[Sindu]

Thank you so much Zainul. The review is inspiring too, to keep me going :)

[zainul]

My pleasure,Sindu.:)

[Mayank]

very beautifully written, "My darling! There's a lot more to live

And suffice it all over again. "

[Sindu]

Thank you Mayank!
Later I realised I was telling that to myself..

[Briana O'Connor]

Very well written. I felt as if I was in a spiral of time. My imagination is a bit wild so I won't even go into the things I was seeing :P I don't want anyone to know on my door with a straight jacket and a needle filled with thorozine :D

[Sindu]

Haha! Nice! I was kinda imagining a time spiral too but your's sounds interesting :P Do tell!!
read moreHaha! Nice! I was kinda imagining a time spiral too but your's sounds interesting :P Do tell!!
If you want away from strait jacket judging eyes you can always msg me LOL
and thanks Brianna..

[Swaroop Manikandan]

there is indeed a lot more to live... nicely written...

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Swaroop.

[hardeep sabharwal]

smooth, well flowed, and really a nice poem dear

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Hardeep!

[Mary Bosworth]

this is such excellent writing! The flow is incredibly smooth

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot!

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting imagery, a very driving feel to the prose.

Did you mean: "… plunged you in a [dive]?"
I think "Time to lift yourself up, turn away from those looming walls." should be two lines, broken at the comma.

[Sindu]

Thanks!
May be it is.. I will change it.
I wondered if I should break it or not. That would increase the lines in the last verse though.

[MomzillaNC]

Well, you could set the closing line apart, to stand on it's own.

[Sindu]

Hmm.. Ok I will do that :)

[MomzillaNC]

Oh! Yes, that works nicely! The visual really adds impact to the closing line.

[Sindu]

yes it does! thanks..

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome