Prophesize O' Prophesier!

O' great prophesier!

Can you see my future that can be?

Can you feel any bits of glee?

Are there any adversities?

In which case,

help me break into a bursary.

Mister prophesier,

Can you feel the glare in my stare?

Collateral of which you must be beware.

Transcending the cream of my dreams

All I ask for

is a few aurum beams to gleam.

My dear prophesier!

Do you spy on all the chicks I can meet?

Oh, but I'm into di-, ahem! I'll be discreet.

Heed! Am no dillydallying damsel, you see.

He must earn it

my respect, I will profess my love openly.

Hey prophesier!

Are you certain you can read?

you're in a too stiff a pose to breath.

Please tell me your heart still beats

Oh, gracious me!

I choked him with my future stream! 

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Fun and thought provoking humor.

[Jamestown]

Great piece of work and very humorous!
Well thought out and delivered, made it really fun and funny
for the reader, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[ManasaC]

Wow!!!! this is wonderfully crafted.... Good thing u didn't know ur future, otherwise ur life wouldn't be an adventure!!! very nice

[R Smith]

I guess you'll never know what the prophesier had to say now but the journey to his end was very amusing Sindu, good witty writing, well done :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The progression of this humorous piece is emphasised by the way you address the recipient in the opening line each time. There is a certain pathos to this even though funny on the surface. It has a sceptical and sarcastic tone. Entertaining and witty!

[Sindu]

Exactly! I wanted every opening to emphasise what comes and you interpreted the pathos correct too. Thanks a lot, you read it and also saw right through it :)

[Surya pradha]

another great piece by you!

[Sindu]

Thanks Surya! Nice to see you again :)

[ANTO]

I really laughed out loud at the first stanza when I got to the 'bursary' line - soo funny Sindu.
The alliteration in the second stanza is second to none, I feel.
i loved the whimsy of the third but all of a sudden the line - he must earn it - on its own - very serious but also funny in its halting strength - like saying to the reader 'Before we go any further...let me tell you, Im no air-head despite all the comedy here.' - brilliant

The last is a killer (literally) Oh ! The fun and the punchline is superb. (btw - theres just one 'c' in choked my friend)

Very witty Sindu. A great message well told in a spirit of warmth and fun.
:))

pssst - the third line in the third stanza has a wee typo Sindu - 'disceet' (discrete)?

[Sindu]

Thank you for such a fun and giggly ( made me laugh) review! i was worried when I posted it if anyone will find this funny but apparently few of you do. That's great!

My fingers jumble and I type some thing else.. thank you for pointing them out. I went with discreet not discrete ;) I confuse myself with choke and chock .. stupid me.
Yes sir! A little warning hidden in there.. haha :)

Thanks again for such a crazy review..

[ANTO]

Your very welcome Sindu - it was great conversing with you this morning. You do have a good wit - bear that in mind - your work is funny - dont doubt that. Funny is good.
Bravo!
:))

[ANTO]

Now THAT is funny - a reviewer who points out a typo (me) only to find that their replacement suggestion is also a typo - its hilarious.
Yes - discreet would be correct - (keep this discreet between me and you and the WC)
xD

[Sindu]

:)) okay... :)

[Sindu]

Very discreet ANTO.. I'm sure no one would know ;)
I didn't want to point it out but it was funny :)

[ANTO]

Yes - it was - I am laughing here (red-faced but laughing)
Im sure no one would have noticed lol - there are no eagle eyes around here ;p

[Sindu]

One of my teachers called me eagle eyes.. will that help :P

[ANTO]

Yeah - thats weird - A Universal Tickle !! :))

[Sindu]

yup weird ... wait weird how?

[ANTO]

That I mentioned 'eagles eyes' of all things - and your teacher calls you that - you dont think thats an odd thing lol...read this Sindu (please) - it'll all make sense (or not lol)
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/antomac1001/1482081/

[Mayank]

somebody's tickling your funny bone? I like the selection of your words, I always love it. Be it anything, they manage to kill it.

[Sindu]

Yes yes! My funny bone is getting some Excerise :) thanks Mayank! Killing is very cathartic :P

[hardeep sabharwal]

:) a smile came on my face after reading a mischievous poem, good one

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Hardeep! That's my goal. Nice to know this made you smile :)

[Saddam]

Every call is going wrong dear!
Just a witty write and of course clever too.
Love it.

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot saddam :) yup, everything is a mess!