Absurd Autonomy

Freedom is autonomous delusion

On roads of sleep sometimes, from dark depths drive

chariots carriages carts cars built from wooden dreams

dreams that grow, nourished with ignorant hope

ignorant of absurd absurdity which is,

i’m afraid

the nature of reality

Sentient intelligent monkey-ape-things hurling and twirling through

a cold space

God the overbearing overlord father caring about kids in an

average-sized solar system sitting in a not-so-great galaxy

dust dogs believing mountain men manage

to acknowledge and care for their existence?

No meaning inherent to mostly nothingness

no symbol no sign no mystical no miracle

except that we should give it

Remove of meaning what you will; give meaning to what you will

To make the absurdly autonomous decision of delusion

is what it means

to be free

Reviews

[GwenLark]

I think this is very well done. I love alliteration and you have succeeded in doing it well. Great job

[JayG]

Reminds me too much of the poem presented in this performance, I'm afraid:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eu_Xk_Vl6fk

Though if you can perform your poem in person. as well as Michael Ball does this one (plus with music) you're okay.

My point is that the reader, unaware of your intent for HOW to read it, and the emotion YOU would place in the reading, must guess at what those odd spaced words signify, and at the emotion they should place in their delivery. They have to guess at how to read it with no foreknowledge of what a line will say, and based on what the words suggest to THEM, based on their background.

So, a line that, to you, have great meaning because of your intent for them, won't have more for the reader than what your computer will place in an aloud reading of it. That's why we need to edit, not according to our intent, but from the viewpoint of a reader, who has but one chance at a first impression.