Everything...

One more optimistic poem from me.I simply can't believe it.... Thinking positve surely changes lives...

 

Everything falls into place

Every move seems full of grace

I never knew that in a night

The twinkling of stars can be so bright

 

Every word feels full of love

Every wink...as cute as a dove

No matter what I do

It'll always be unique; it'll always be true

 

Every sound is a melody

Every taste as sweet as honey

Everything, finally, feels so right

That even the dark sky, now, seems bright

Author's Note

Do you think it's childish???

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

"Every sound is a melody
Every taste as sweet as honey
Everything, finally, feels so right
That even the dark sky, now, seems bright" I love this stanza... It's not childish.... It's innocent (yes there is a difference lol) If only life could be like that everyday.... but it's not... but the night is always bright for that is when imagination comes to life.... When i was scared of the dark i would always look up to the sky and see the stars.... It would make it seem like it was as bright as the sun.... great write!

[Nely Amorim]

i think it's sweet... innocent but not childish.. remember the perspective of others will always vary but it's your own opinion about YOUR writing that counts.. write to please yourself and along the way you will touch and affect others... write from the heart and i think you have here... as you go along you will continue to improve and experience life that will give you further material to write about... keep writing:D

[forfila]

I dont think its childish,,,,and if it were deemed that way, there is nothing wrong with using your inner child to write, especially of love. I think it is very descriptive, enchanting and beautifull.

Love,
Me