Answer Me!

More random thoughts put into words...

I thought that you loved me

I thought that you cared

I thought that you'd wipe my sorrows away

I thought that you'd be there

 

I thought I really did matter

I thought I made a difference

I thought you liked me just the way I am

I never thought about the consequence

 

But now I know

That I'm a nobody to you

Whenever our eyes meet

You ask,"who're you?"

 

I know I'm not perfect

I know I'm not a genius

I know I'm not pretty

I know I talk ridiculous

 

I know that you have stopped thinking of me

Or maybe you care but why don't you show

When I'm truly living my life; time flies

Otherwise, it's walks damn too slow

 

Tell me now. Answer me!

I don't wanna remain sad

Am I really not worthy at all?

Am I really that bad?

 

Author's Note

Ok! I'm not in a mood to write optimistic poem today. Just feeling...argh!!
I tried a new kind of framework. Atleast it's new to me. I hope ou find a pattern up there and a satisfactory rhyme scheme...
P.S. - It's not about any guy....lol

Reviews

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I'm not a fan of rhyme Siya, but it seems to jolly along in rhythmic flow. Anyone who can think this way about someone who is supposed to love them needs to take a good look at their thought patterns because this will tell them to tell the guy/girl to take a hike. A good piece and for the right reader...a lesson in love gone South without hope of a future.
I hope this is fiction, if not forget him!!!
Cheers,
Helen :-)))

[Dorchadas]

beautiful expression of emotion...
I love how this poem unashamedly shows anger, sadness and vunerability...
It's a real display of strength... the ability to express emotion... keep this intensity forever but lose the loser... believe me when I say if he's real you can do better

[Mysteral - Night Prowle..]

A good poem, but I won't say it's your best. It would look ridiculous if I say every one is the best... Not that there is anything wrong with it, only that it doesn't have the impact of some of your other pieces.

Whenever our eyes meet
You ask,"who're you?"

I might have said, 'They ask, "who're you?" talking about the eyes ask rather than "you" ask.

[Pinky]

Whelp i am a huge fan of rhyme and i thought it was nicely done!!! More like greatly done!

[Angel Bird]

Yes this has a good sheme and is very rhythmic. I could easily imagine it to become a song or something.
Great rhythm, good piece!

[kurrupted]

its a lovely piece of write, and the flow is good ( i mean really good).
strong poem, a concept we all can relate to...and one thing i have realised with such a situation is, it aint like the other person does'nt really care or anything close to that,its just that (either they take one for granted) they kind of get absorbed into the things they do....and whenever this negative issue is addressed they come out deeply moved because that was'nt infact what really transpired just our own subconcious working within the context of "ARE YOU NEGLECTED?" kind of frame...nice work.