Cry

Haiku/senryu

Rain brushing against my face

Hiding and washing all my tears away

You won't see me crying

Author's Note

I don't know what it is...
I guess, it's senryu...hmm...

Reviews

[RegalKittyBits]

The rain brushes away many tears

[Gaiamethod]

Why is it so difficult for us to be seen as vulnerable? Wonderful writing.

[Pj]

This is so sad...you were in a dark place, I hope you're feeling better :D

The imagery was so beautiful...I could see her pain through her tears and could also then imagine an angled rain mixing with her tears...absolutely wonderful!!!

[Sarah]

I really love this. It's so short, and yet holds so much emotion. It can be related to any situation - the idea of hiding your weaknesses in front of people, even though you really feel like crying. Great job. (:

[Colleen C Dunphy]

I agree with Faerie Whisper, I enjoyed it, but the word pounding is a little off putting.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Makes sense. ;) Such a sad poem, yet true. I think take advantage of rain in order to get a good cry. lol Awesome haiku/senryu. Keep up the good work. ^^

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Staci Brown]

i have lil knowledge of the mechanics of various styles in poetry, but i REALLY LOVE this poem!!! great idea, lot of depth hon :D

only change i'd suggest is a different word for "pounding"

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)