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The more I try to carry on

The more I fall behind

The more I try to linger on

The more it messes up my mind

The more I try to breakaway

The more it starts to hurt

The more I try to part away

The more I fall in dirt

The more I try to forget it

The more I remember

The more I try to accept it

The more I surrender

The more I try to guess it

The more I feel like a fool

The more I try to confess it

The more it becomes my tool

Author's Note

Ohk. this is random write. don't ask me what 'it' is because I myself don't know. I started with something in mind and by the time I finished the poem, it was all messed up (obviously).
I just want to know how do the rhymes sound. Call it a rhyme worksheet for me, lolz...

Reviews

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awesome

[C.L. Wilson]

It's a chain of event's. Everything has an effect on something. Clever use of repetition. I don't think you messed up. It sounds fine to me.