Isolated Soul

My first attempt in poetry.

I deserve to have some piece of mind,
If not all the time, than at least once in a while,
I grew up into this world,
With no fears and no sins,
I was innocent as a bird,
Free and determined

Why can’t I just go back in time?
I would choose where I stand,
And with whom to be,
I would take my choices wisely
With such care and thought
As if was a matter of live or die

While I am here, I cannot comprehend,
The meaning of free will,
Everything is planned and I am,
Waiting anxiously, still,

Suffocation fills my lungs,
As though my world is full with smoke
Because of it I can’t breath
Or have my own clean space

Don’t I deserve to have a painting of my own?
One that I would frame and hold,
Or some beautiful flowers,
Which I would watch over,
And take good care.

Don’t I deserve to be human?
Am I not a human being?
Or am I just another isolated soul?

Author's Note

English is my second language so bear with me.

Reviews

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Excellent work, newbie, lol! I can feel the sincerity, the deep nostalgic and wistful quality of the words and your wanting control of your life. And that is truly all that poetry is. Well done.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

for your first attempt this is very good~ the emotions are clear and well presented~ the questing extremely sincere~

[Cody Wiggins]

Well it seems like your first. It was great. Might i ask what your first language is?

[Ray]

It's truthful and thats all that really matters isn't it, and either way, it's good first language or not

[Raja]

Maybe this is your first try with poetry, but this every ounce of truth for you to express your thoughts, and you can easily be called a good poet who knows how to play with words as per emotion. I like the poem. Keep it up!

Thanks.

Raja