Through the Eyes of the Untold Lore

Through the Eyes of the Untold Lore

By: Adam M. Snow

 

Through these stained eyes, dark is all I see

yet I try to live, believing this is me.

But all I could do is place my heart on a page,

and watch it rot away with every age.

 

All I am through your eyes is a ghost,

whom you don't dare miss the most.

All you are through my eyes, is hopelessness;

but my words I write are my distress.

 

Peaking through my once soulless muse,

as my heart lies victim to your solemn abuse.

I live to be your puppet, nothing more

but I am a writer of many lore.

 

And as I dare write with missing heart,

it is you whom my stories start.

 

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Reviews

[Chris]

an angry and melancholy work

[Talks To Trees]

melancholic is the word. a sadness of being in the shadow. :)

[Jetta Zippora]

Love it. Standing ovation. Amazing write, friend. Truly.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you so very much for your kind comment

[Nath]

What this write certainly does not lack, are heart and feeling. I believe sadness and pain make great muses, and writing is an excellent cure. By pouring out our feelings in ink on paper, we heal. I like this write, it shows so much emotion, and where there are feelings, even the sadness caused by loss, there is a heart to give them a home.
Brilliant poem!

[Arthur Rider]

good job

[Renée]

Oh Adam..even your poems of a wounded heart are beautiful..

[MOON]

Poignant write , place my heart on a page , rot with every age. See the despair.

[Mockingbird]

full of emotion and despair. sounds like the person will take any kind of abuse from the one he loves because she is his muse.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Really really nice, I love this and really enjoyed it. So much nice emotion in this and such great descriptions and words used, rhyming is so spot on as well and fits so good.

I really like these parts:

"But all I could do is place my heart on a page,
and watch it rot away with every age."

"All I am through your eyes is a ghost,
whom you don't dare miss the most.
All you are through my eyes, is hopelessness;
but my words I write are my distress."

"I live to be your puppet, nothing more
but I am a writer of many lore."

"And as I dare write with missing heart,
it is you whom my stories start."

[Coyote Poetry]

"And as I dare write with missing heart,
it is you whom my stories start."
Sometime we write best when we know pain and misery. I have 30 books of poems written in the darkness of loss and disappointment. They are my best poetry I believe. I like the places you took me and the honest ending. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote