Wallflower

Wallflower
By: Adam M. Snow

 

I see her alone in far distant breeze;
as umbra despair her, which does not please.
I looked into her eyes, and felt emptiness still-
a little bit of hope as she falls ill.

 

It is sadness which draws me to her;
the feelings of lost and fear as it were.
She hides that tear so no one to see
what lies within her, the feeling of free.

 

She appears translucent in a crowd of many;
she is to us but a lowly memory.
She longs for that which I cannot give;
a feeling of love, a reason to live.

 

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Reviews

[LochnezzMonster]

Oh. I love this one. "She appears translucent in a crowd of many" is such a powerful line. It's what made me relate to your writing and a reader should always get a feeling of understanding the authors written word. There's emotion put in this that I can personally appreciate. The description of the girl throughout your work gives you a sense of how much the narrator cares for her and what she is like. I feel as if this is a lovely, tragic romance.

[TL Boehm]

She appears translucent in a crowd of many;
this is a beautiful line. Well done

[Jetta Zippora]

Such simple, yet complex thoughts. Vivid and hazy at once. I love this kind of writing. It's like wandering through a fog and the words surround you like a lilting wind. I feel privileged to read such brilliant writing, friend.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thanks so much

[olla]

this one is very good.. I am guessing it is some one dear to you.. there is too much truth here to be just poetic whimsy.. when the heart speaks.. the soul listens.. my soul is listening..

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[L0v3craft]

I really like the rhyme and its quite easy to read, though it is a rather gloomy, melancholic piece-- reminds me of myself T-T

[Adam M. Snow]

Glad you enjoyed it

[tynamite]

This is amazing!

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Talks To Trees]

Reminds me of my chilhood of growing. I once was the wallflower, You brought this to the table quite well.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Caradoc]

A well written, hauntingly beautiful poem. It has a feeling of...being archaic, in a style not often used today.

I like the last two lines the best. They really bring home the tragedy inherent in this piece. Nicely done.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[MoriartyMesa]

Very enjoyable.