Tragic Heart

Tragic Heart
By: Adam M. Snow

 

I wait my days alone,
in chambers of dark endure.
I hold back my tears alone,
until blood shed from my eyes.

 

I hold back my voice,
await for mercy in time.
You put me here by choice,
now you watch me die.

 

You stole my heart and taint my mind;
you shown your love but not full.
My heart was not like yours of rind,
I was weak but now am more.

 

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Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

I agree with Coyote below--and I also noticed how the narrator realized his lover's heart was rind; that's always significant and painful, seeing someone you love for who they really are, rather than what you dream they are

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words led the reader into sadness. I like the emotion and honest feel of the words.
"You put me here by choice,
now you watch me die."
Sometime we must fall to learn to become strong. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Dalebear]

beautiful written and very strongly put well done

[♥ Kinnixk]

Beautiful. Nice write :)

[Jazique]

That was nice, that was just amazing and I love the ending "I was weak but, now am more."
I hope the whole world gets to know of your work one day because that was wonderful, Well done; so sad emotional, so great.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Speak in Silence]

This is an amazing piece, good luck :)

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Speak in Silence]

you're welcome :)

[Jetta Zippora]

Gorgeous. Simple as that. Keep on writing, friend. Your words are inspirational, haunting, and epic.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you and you the same

[Renée]

Well done Adam.. " I was weak but now am more" ...So much more ( :

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[afra]

very dark and deep ....well done

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Amila Jay]

I hold back my voice,
await for mercy in time.
You put me here by choice,
now you watch me die.

Amazing write :))

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you