Tragic Heart

Tragic Heart
By: Adam M. Snow

 

I wait my days alone,
in chambers of dark endure.
I hold back my tears alone,
until blood shed from my eyes.

 

I hold back my voice,
await for mercy in time.
You put me here by choice,
now you watch me die.

 

You stole my heart and taint my mind;
you shown your love but not full.
My heart was not like yours of rind,
I was weak but now am more.

 

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Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I like the title and the lines:
I hold back my voice,
await for mercy in time.
Well penned.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[MOON]

Poignant striking write.

[Freedom's Child]

Both you emotion and imagery are terrific. The first stanza really took hold of me and drew me in. "Until blood shed from my eyes is so vivid and dark, I love it. Great write.

[realmwriter]

Just desserts await those whos' hearts are not true to who they are with. Truly fantastic.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[realmwriter]

You are indeed very welcome...!

[tynamite]

I love this. I had to read it slowly. "I hold back my voice" Powerful!

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[Talks To Trees]

Live ...Love...Learn. All a part of the growth. I caught the last line too but read between. Understood well what was being relayed. Saw that you corrected. lol

[Texas Greg]

...and you'll get your just dessert
all in due time.

Aye! been there, done that.
Sometimes the alone part is the killer. Makes ya wonder if it's worth trying again. i think so. Wrote an article on breach of trust and another on forgiveness. Not sure about posting here, though...
You did much in few words.
Good job!

[Adam M. Snow]

thank you

[Delilah Campbell]

I really like this. I have to ask though; did you purposely write the last line as this,

I was weak but no am more.

That line confused me a bit. I do like the poem though. Let me know on that last line. I want to know if I simply interpreted wrong.

Delilah

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you for pointing out that typo, my keyboard been sticking on me. It is meant to be now

[Delilah Campbell]

Ah, that's what I thought, lol. You managed to get a cross what you wanted in few lines. It was well received in my book. I will be watching for more from you.

I have a poem up myself. I have been told that the style is Victorian rather than modern, but you may like it still. I hope anyway, lol. Give it a try when you can.