A Teasing Storm

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

A Teasing Storm
By: Adam M. Snow

 

I watch from the distance, as the storm covers me;
pouring it's dreadful rain as the dust blinds me.
I look in awe and disgrace of the thundering clouds,
as the storm covered plain with a pouring rain shrouds.
Flash after flash would race across the sky,
beauty of lights would chase the clouds floating by.
The roaring songs of the wind bristling through the trees,
would be enough to put even myself at ease;
but no, this storm did not cover me,
just a tease floating by for me to see.

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

I feel like we experienced the same storm... Denton I presume?... :) None the less you have great focus on the subject matter at hand here, I would say spice it up a bit and draw some cross references into the piece or future poems tell me what you see with out telling me what it is, add some mystery to keep me intrigued.

[Renée]

very descriptive ! reminds me of the storms at the river..taunting teasing never producing the cooling rain I desire !

[Southern Cross]

Nice descriptive view of nature though it can be allegorical in nature and create a certain imagery as to life and it's emotional hardships. As we here in Miami are expecting a Hurricane, I hope it passes over us much like your "tease"

[marlayesterday]

I enjoyed this poem. Very beautifully written.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[The Analog Kid]

Nice description of what it's like to stand back and watch figuratively. The short form worked well.

[R J Askew]

I think this is a brilliant line >>> The roaring songs of the wind bristling through the trees,

I can just see it as you describe and the word 'bristling' is a brilliant word choice.

The whole poem is strongly observed and evocative with a strong sense of relief at missing the worst of what life has to throw at us, for now at least.

[Androglossia]

Wishful thinking? Maybe not.. Or is it a thought in terms of what you would like to happen rather than being realistic and giving a true assessment of a situation based upon the facts you saw? Either way, the poem is fantastic, it challenged my thinking though I don't like storms and lightnings:)

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This is so amazing, I can really imagine the storm.
Excellent poem!
100/100

[Rhianne Ney]

It's a great poem talking about a storm which is not figuratively real... I like your poems and the way you write them very expressive (:

[realmwriter]

I too have wistnesed that but ih how much better the storm is when finally she lets go. What a rush... Very good write.

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you

[realmwriter]

You're most welcome.