The Ghost

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

The Ghost
By: Adam M. Snow

 

In this world I sought for,
who I am and many more;
without a reason but a treason,
without a life, but with a life and none.

To live is profound, much greater is death;
if I could confound, it is that I'm not worthy
for life and for death.

 

Do I confined myself within my chamber,
to count the days till I remember?
Who am I? Who am I?

 

Who am I to curse myself so freely, so easily?
A ghost with a reflection,
with no hope, no resurrection.
I encumber my tears
with all things I fear,
there is no end for which I dream.

Reviews

[Autumn]

Beautifully written, with this hint of spine-chilling atmosphere conveying more power to every word used.
Stunning!

[Adam M. Snow]

Thank you so kindly

[Britt Foster]

Very beautiful, and the picture fits perfectly!
I'm curious if you meant "SO I confined myself within my chamber" as opposed to "Do I confined.." though. That line held up the flow a bit. Other than that, the flow is magnificent!

[Wolfwind]

Oooh! This piece was so deeply beautiful! I would even go as far as saying it was only a point from purfection. That point only left off do to the first line of the second stanza. A suggestion would be... "Am I confined....." or... "Do I confine...." If that line were to be resolved of it's slight belch in flow... I would certainly say that you have crafted one of the finest and most powerful flows of timless pondering I've ever read.

Fantastic Flow of Skill!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[TL Boehm]

to be forever lost in a half life... a ghost of a life a memory this poem is both resonant and sad. Well done.

[Mockingbird]

spooky and depressing. great job.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

An explosive piece that resonates within ones mind a long time after reading it, well done, good read.

[pasdepoisson]

I like the imagery employed here. I do think the rhythm's a little odd with the irregular stanza lengths and line end/internal rhyme structure.

My favorite lines are
"I encumber my tears
with all things I fear,"