Glimpse in Another Man's Reflection

Glimpse in Another Man's Reflection

By: Adam M. Snow

 

I woke myself in another man's life.

Reflection shown was I yet not I,

A glimpse of my lone self strife.

My timely age shows me to die.

But I be not ready in a time such as this,

So it came to me like a demon abyss.

 

I scream my grief, my aching soul.

I plead my savior, death upon me.

Let me live not this life I'm curse,

Write upon my immoral verse.

 

Let this be a dream, I know it not.

Do I dare keep on living?

I know not this living plot,

Or of itself a new misgiving.

 

Leave myself not I in chamber,

Until I die on morning ember.

Awake myself, my life not this.

Freeing the nights, my demon abyss.

I died to wake but life not changed,

Although the likes of life estranged.

To live this curse my wakeful day,

But at night I would wander away.

Reviews

[Kaylor Mason]

The style of this poem is VERY intriguing--you'd have to read it a few times to puzzle it out. "Awake myself, my life not this" That's pretty accurate for dreams. Where you are in them, yet not in them, both alive and dead and watching your live/dead self from way off, all at the same time. And all the while, you can't figure out if it's you, or you watching yourself. Is this told like a 3rd-person narrator, or is it first-hand, while the dreamer's dreaming it? Whichever the case, it's pretty good. "A glimpse of my lone self strife." . . . ain't that the truth!

[Joshua Donahue]

The writing here was great. It makes the reader think and read each line carefully, but at the same time, read it speedily to see what's next. It was definitely intriguing. :)

[Daytonight]

Very intriguing poem. The third stanza was my favorite. Well done. keep on penning.

[Jazique]

Very nice and interesting poem to wake in some one elses life in see thier own reflection as such a great idea and you did it so well with descriptions and all of the feelings of a anothers Man's place. It reminds me of the new movie coming out waking in anothers life but, deeper with the whole "I scream my grief, my aching soul. I plead my savior, death upon me." and so on the words are strong. Well done and keep up the good writing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

We can sometimes feel like a stranger to ourselves but our subconscious will never lie to us, that is why dreams are so important. We must take heed and listen to them. Nicely penned.

[TheElfPrincess]

It was a very interesting poem, it kept me reading and reading until the end. Well done I enjoyed this.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Very interesting, each word inviting into enjoyment and pulling the reader in to read, i enjoyed each line... really great flow and rhyme

[Coyote Poetry]

A wild place you took me in your words. I have been having some bad dreams too. I need a long vacation. I like how you described the fear and the hope it is just a dream.
"Freeing the nights, my demon abyss.
I died to wake but life not changed,"
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Matthew Smith]

Hm. Interesting. Nice way to dance around a topic via words--your wordplay was good, your rhymes were pretty much perfect.

Anything negative to say would be purely personal and only focused on general style. It wouldn't do to bring those bits up--we each have our own. Anyway, yeah. Good poem, good enough for me check out your other pieces, so I eventually shall.

All in all, nice. Good work. So on.