Our first kiss lingers

Our first kiss lingers come rain come shine

It was a soul to soul melody, yours to mine.

Love was soaring, like a seagull above the sea

Our hearts danced in harmony with the melody

 

It was a soul to soul melody, yours to mine

Brighter and brighter our love began to shine

Our hearts danced in harmony with the melody

Long after our lips were released and set free

 

Brighter and brighter our love began to shine

Love was soaring like a seagull above the sea

Long after our lips were released and set free

Our first kiss lingers come rain come shine

 

Author's Note

Constructive criticism will be appreciated

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

ooooh, I like the subtle repetition in this.. This is tender, sweet, romantic.. It highlights the joining and union that happens on a deeper level when lips meet. (not really a fan of the word "spree" in this line, maybe use melody.. it rhymes and something that hearts can dance to.) otherwise, I love this piece.. nice job..

[Centfie]

Thanks a lot for your positive remarks and suggestion. 'Melody' is beautiful, I see... Thanks.

[AprilRN1210]

You're welcome, it was my pleasure. I meant every word.. such a beautiful write...

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write. It flows so good too...Bravo

[Centfie]

Thank you Sami Khalil

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[ron]

Very beautifull. that is how it should be.

[Centfie]

Thank you for your nice comment